Mountain pass
Bracing himself against the torrent of icy wind that rushed towards him down the narrow pass, the lone figure prepared himself for the challenge ahead. Slip my feet went as I moved on the slippery stairs covered in freezing cold snow. As i carried on walking up the stairs a great big whoosh came through and I almost fall on the stairs but keep on walking. Rocks was moving off the top and get in my way. And more and more where coming down from the top so a ran and I got to the top of the stairs and I saw a beautiful view from the top of the stairs
Tino pai Ana, I like the way you've packed a lot of action and great vocabulary into a short paragraph. Is it you or a him in the story? I'm a little confused. The picture does remind me of some stairs I climbed on a hike in Canada. Keep up the blogging.
ReplyDeleteHi Ana, I really enjoyed reading your writing. I wonder what the beautiful view was from the top of the stairs...the ocean, a forest filled with native birds, mountains??
ReplyDeleteA little learning tip for you (from the 3rd to last line) where-were..which word to use?
where- where are my shoes? I can't see where they are.
were-there were many people in the park
Which word do you think it should be in this line?